[Original] Fahe Reingard [A]

[Fahe Reingard]

ORIGINAL or CANON:
Original

Series of Origin:
N/A

What was the inspiration for them / do they embody a particular feeling or emotion?
I haven't noticed many nobodies on site, so this is a way to add to the diversity of the cast. Plus now that the organizations gone I wanted to explore what happens to nobodies who aren't given a name, who they are, a group, nothing. What happens to them?

Name: 
Fahe Reingard

Nickname:
Fahe

Age: 
17

Gender:
Male

Species:
Fifiti:
Someone who looks like a human but has wings of a bird, due to them being part bird they can communicate with other birds they meet

Being Type:
Nobody

Position:
True Neutral


Appearance:
A 5'4" boy, who wears a pair of grey jeans on. He also wears a white T-shirt and a blue vest with a yellow stripe following the bottom. He has a pair of silver sparrow wings on his back that are usually folded up behind him. Lastly, he wears a black beanie that is folded backwards.

History:
When he was a young boy, he was living in a forest filled with tree houses, huts, caves. Fifiti flying from place to place, Proxis walking below, and Salis swimming in the waters surrounding the community. He began to fly as he grew up and started exploring the place where he lived. It was filled with fantastical wonders, like a cave filled with wise owls, a creak leading to a waterfall, and even a cliff overlooking the entire community below him. He soon met two others in his village, the Fifiti girl Dequis who was part hawk, and the Proxis boy Herl who was part bear. Dequis was the daughter of the Fifiti leader, Oatu, kept at home for most of her life she charged at the door when Fahe knocked. Before he knew what happened, he was pulled into the house. Dequis pulled him towards her parents saying that there was a boy that knocked at the door. Fahe introduced himself to her parents, and soon Fahe was pulled into Dequis' life and became friends with her. Herl was the son of a spice farmer, he worked on the fields daily. Thinking his father valued the plants more than him he ran away into the Forest. He made a cave his home and he was living there when Fahe and Dequis found him while exploring. Running out of food he went with them back to town to get food, starting to fall for Dequis he started following the two.

Herl stayed with Dequis and Fahe more and more, and the more he stayed with them the more he had a crush on Dequis. When he finally confessed his love to Dequis, she thought it was a nice offer but it wasn't something she was ready for so she turned him down. Thinking she was in love with Fahe, Herl started being more aggressive to Fahe. His rage started burning more and more, and soon darkness started spreading in the world. As monsters started appearing, Herl used them to attack his old village. As the heartless started attacking the citizens, everyone had to learn to fight. Sadly it wasn't enough and as the heartless reached the heart of the world Dequis had fallen. As Fahe protected her body from the heartless, the world was destroyed, killing him.

He woke up in a strange town then, Traverse Town to be specific, and he couldn't remember a thing. As he started wandering around the town he met a moogle. Not knowing what else to do he waved to the moogle who, instantly knowing the boy wasn't from around the town, as he didn't recognize him, asked Fahe his name. Starting to panic he blurted out the the only thing he remembered, Fahe, the moogle took this as a good sign and motioned for Fahe to follow him. Going through town he saw the many things there, taking in all that he could until they arrived at the inn. Guessing that Fahe had no money he payed for a room and left him to his devices.

As the days in the town turned to weeks Fahe started to remember who he was and his original world and Desquis. He started longing for his world back. So he decided that he's going to save his world from wherever it went. As he fell asleep one night Traverse Town fell to the darkness and he was again swept from his new home. Now in Twilight Town he will do whatever he can to protect the place he now calls home.

Current Primary Objective:
Protect Twighlight Town
Discover what happened to Forest of the Wild

Learning type:
Visual

Personality:
A fake teen, who's boisterous and happy on the outside but longs for his old life and morns his lost friend. He loves exploring a new location, especially when he's exploring it with a close friend. He usually prefers to stay in the air rather than walking and his sudden outbursts to keep up or to look at something he found can startle some. He cares for the worlds more than anything. He knows Herl caused the destruction of his home world and can never forgive him.

Home World:
Forest of the Wild

A massive forest filled with Fifiti, those who have wings, Proxis, those who have tails and claws, and Salis those with tails instead of legs. The Fifiti all live in tree houses looking above the village, the Proxis live in the caves and huts on the ground, and Salis live in the streams and rivers. The rulers of the world are three sanctioned ones, a Fifiti hawk, a Proxis lion, and a Salis bass. Oatu, the Fifiti leader, is a careful thinking man who tries to find the logic of situation, he usually tries to go in a direction that's for the good of the village. Rudo, the Proxis leader, is a cunning man who tries to go for something that will benefit the Proxis and may impact the Salis and Fifiti in any way. Bueir, the Salis leader, is a quick thinking and sharp woman who tries to make an inpact in the village for the good of those less helped than herself. The three decide on almost everything in town the rules, the housing structure, the way water is given out, it's quite a lucrative system but it has worked for centuries.

The Forest surrounding the town is vast and filled with secrets among secrets. It's an unexplored explored area. Which is to say that it's layout changes from time to time. You never know what you'll find when adventuring outside the village. It could be a simple stick or a cave full of torches. However some locations can be locked if you have slept in the location you can always find your way back by instinct alone.

The trees in the town's farm grow mostly all the food anyone in town could need. For the carnivores fish is passed about weekly. The town is split into three sections, the farming district, the living district, and the shopping district.
The farming district is three farms that grow spices, fruit, and vegetables respectively. The living district is a place full of people, anyone in town, lives here. Lastly the shopping district is a place for getting anything you need, when the influx of heartless came it turned into an armaments, with swords, bows, armor, and spears were given out to protect the town.

Natural Affinities/Abilities/Skills:
Wing Shot:
A feather fired from his wing that can go through weak foes, he can fire multiple at once if he uses both wings.

Flight:
As he has wings he has the power of flight

Soaring Slash:
A leap that turns into a glide that cuts any foes on either side

Limitations/Drawbacks:
Wing Shot:
Each feather will come back after a while it's not instant, his multiple feather shot can only be used once per two posts

Flight:
The loss of feathers due to wing shot lessons the time he can fly

Soaring Slash:
He can only perform this on the ground, his attack is lessened when some feathers are gone

Passive:


Heartborn Tempest


Weapon:
Sparrow's Wings

Role Playing Sample:
As he looked around the small room he had lived in since the beginning of his time in Traverse Town he sighed. It was a boring little town but it's all he had. He went and locked the door to his room, as he laid down on his bed, he heard the Heartless start scratching on his door. Hearing this he got up from his bed as he knew that there was a small chance they might appear in his room. When nothing appeared he sat on his bed again. "Guess it was a cat or something."

He laid down and fell asleep on his bed and as the town fell to darkness, he drifted into dreams of what his life was. As he opened his eyes to an endless nightfall on a roof of a house he jolted awake. Unsure of his surroundings he jumped into flight and looked around. "Not another one," he said as he looked around, "I guess it's time to explore." He slowly drifted towards the ground and looked from left to right, it was time to explore this brand new place.

[Bayde]

The soft snores of the moogle sitting behind the dark wood of the desk come to a sudden hault upon your entry into the office. Bayde blinks three times in rapid succession, then shakes his head back and forth. He spares a short glance to his empty mug, and lets out a small sigh, his shoulders drooping the smallest bit before he adopts a more alert posture.

"Yes, yes, come in, kuu. Let's see what we're working with."

Tired eyes ponder over the paper, and it doesn't take long before he glances back up with an inquisitive look.

"I don't mean to sound un-kuu-th, but are you sure you've put enough effort into this?

You see, amnesia is a bit of a lazy plot device for a character like this. Between your lack of a driving force behind the character in the inspiration section, the vague, short history, and the complete lack of a homeworld for this new race of people you're trying to introduce, it doesn't feel like Fahe can truly be called a character at this point.

The best advice I can give right now is for you to take some time and come up with a solid backstory. Give him some friends he's lost or forgotten. Let us know Fahe better than he knows himself right now so we can get a better handle on what sort of character you're going for, kuu."

The moogle gives a slow shake of his head.

"I mean, if you're fine with this the way it is, I won't fault you for it. Just don't expect the road ahead to be easy as far as character development goes."

[Oswald]

Mostly I was going on the fact that when Roxas appeared in Twilight Town he had no memories as well. I don't think anyone's aware of how anyone else came into existence or their memories but Roxas and Xion had no memories of who they were (Xion because she was a puppet).

[Bayde]

From the Kingdom Hearts wiki:

Because of their missing hearts, Nobodies are said to be incapable of feeling emotions by every credible source. Some humanoid Nobodies pretend to possess emotions, fooling others as well as themselves. On the other hand, Nobodies manage to keep their memories of their former lives, but unusual Nobodies that were born from special circumstances, such as Roxas, lack memories of their former selves. Through these memories, Nobodies are able to remember what it was like to have emotions, thus allowing them to respond correctly to specific situations.

When Nobodies first appear in the world, their memories are scattered and distorted. However, over time they gain those memories back and are able to emulate emotions. That's the canon of the Kingdom Hearts series.

Roxas is also a complicated Nobody - he did eventually start to remember Sora, as evidenced in the games, but something didn't quite get him to the point of truly remembering. Some speculate it was Ven's heart within him, others think that a year just wasn't enough time.

It's fine if you want your character to have amnesia, but it will have to clear up eventually. At that point, he'll need a world to have come from, a group of people he used to know, and memories that allow him to pretend to have emotions. So far, you haven't given any of that in your profile. This is why I'm concerned about it.

[Fahe Reingard]

Bleh... Give me a second I'll redo the profile

Edit: Done, plus I got some coffee for you!

[Bayde]

A 5'4" boy who wear a pair of grey jeans on.

"You'll want to use 'wears' here."

"Lastly he wears a black beanie that is folded backwards."

"Remember to put commas after your prepositions."

When he was a young boy he was living in a forest filled with tree houses, huts, caves.

"The comment about prepositions applies here as well, and you should also remember that it's good practice to use the character's name before throwing out less-specific pronouns when you start a new section. Also, I think that you might have ended this sentence a little too soon, kuu."

His rage started attracting the monsters to the village and the villagers who lived in a peaceful community until then had to quickly learn to fight again, it wasn't enough as the world was lost to the monsters and Fahe perished while trying to reach for Dequis.

"That comma should be a period, kuu.

The rulers of the world are three sanctioned ones, a Fifiti owl, a Proxis lion, and a Salis bass, the three decide on almost everthing in town The rules, the housing structure, the way water is given out, it's quite lucrative but it has worked for centuries.

"I think you meant for this to be two sentences.

Moving along, I want to talk about Herl and Dequis. They seem poorly developed for people who are supposed to be friends with Fahe. By that, I mean that Dequis has no description beyond having hawk wings. She doesn't really do anything in your backstory besides follow Fahe around. Please try to flesh out her character some more.

There's also the matter of Herl. His reasons for becoming the villain of your story are just a little too weak to be believable. He became upset that Fahe and Dequis were always flying around faster than he could run, so he began attacking them? Doesn't this seem a little far-fetched? He should have a bit more of an arc to him besides just that, shouldn't he?

One more thing - where are any of their parents? They're supposedly childhood friends, so their parents should know each other, yes?

I see that you've put a little effort into defining a general system of government, though your three leaders could use some names and personalities. What do they people they govern think about them? What sorts of things do they do on a day to day basis? Be specific. What are some of the biggest things they've done, and how did that change the way people lived?

Your world is off to a good start, but the more detail you add into it, the more you'll get out of them. You also have quite a lot of room for growth when it comes to your side characters. Make sure to put some real thought into who they are. They're just as important as your character, kuu."

[Fahe Reingard]

I think it's pretty good now

[Bayde]

The black-clad Moogle stares at your papers, scratching behind his ear with his signature red pen. He seems to be a little more disoriented than usual.

"Hm. I think I see where this is going, kuu."

He sets the application down on his desk, taking to the air as he floats effortlessly around and digs through various drawers from the cabinets he has around his office.

"I know I stashed it somewhere around here. Just where is it, kuu."

His eyes flash open the slightest amount, and he darts back to his chair before laying two sheets of paper out in front of you.

"Here they are."

Commas After Introductory Phrases

Commas After Introductory Clauses

"By and large, your biggest struggles are with these two things. Please look over these and try to find areas in your profile where these rules are being broken. There's...quite a few, to say the least."

[Fahe Reingard]

Ok I think I got it, edited and all, personality and rp sample tweaked because I read history again

[Bayde]