Ienzo

[paopuluver]

name: Ienzo
Nickname(optional): Ienzy
Dark XII Nickname: The Deceptive Calligrapher

Age: 23

Gender: Male

Species: Heartless

Position: Evil
Dark XII Position: Number VI in the Dark XII

Power(s): Ienzo has the ability to materialize items that he draws on his two scrolls that he always has with him

Dragon scroll- Ienzo grabs his two scrolls, opens them then throws them into the air, then quickly jumps after them and draws a fire dragon on one and a water dragon on the other, then he call’s his dragon drawings to come to life and come off of the page, when he calls the dragons rise up out of the scrolls and spiral upwards 20 feet then when they reach this height they fly directly at Ienzo’s enemy dousing his enemy in water and fire.

Icy Grave- Ienzo draws a picture of an icy cave, when this is done Ienzo throws his scrolls up and he yells " Icy Grave" when this is said his scrolls start to glow with a faint blue light then start to shoot out long, sharp shards of ice.

Weapon(s): Ienzo carry’s two long pieces of rolled up paper kept on a rolls of cherrywood in two pockets on the inside of his suit

Picture(optional):

Appearance: Ienzo has a mild complection, an oval shaped head, and a normal build. Ienzo has pale blue eyes that can peirce into the heart of the pure, as blue as his eyes might be dont think because of his appearance that hes a push over, because i promis you hes not. another factor adding to this is that he is never really happy. He has long navy hair that he has cut so he can just tilt his head slightly so the hair will be out of his face and blocking the sun. He prefers wereing his black suit, which consist of a black overcoat with a white dress-shirt underneath and a pair of black work casual pants, He is rarely ever seen out of these clothes he has grown fond of.


Personality: Ienzo is one of the more anti-social member of the Dark XII he has or had at one point fights with all of the other XI members of the Dark XII this is because when there were somebodies Ienzo was the youngest to volunteer to be one of Ansems assistances for this reason he was usually treated badly and picked on for his hight and his age by the others.

He may be not be friendly but if you insult him you wont live long enough to regret it, because he has the quickest temper in all of the worlds. He holds a resentment towards the other members of the Dark XII Because he was the youngest of the six original apprentices, and is always longing and fighting to prove that age isn’t everything, he has a strong felling of self right and self confidence.

Original World: Radiant Garden

Current Residing World: The World That Never Was


History/Background: Back when Ansem was ruling over Radiant gardens Ienzo would always look up to Ansem as a hero " I want to be just like Ansem one day" he would say, but when that faithful day came his Respect for Ansem grew to an un- reasonable point. when Ienzo was in his early teen years he had watched his parents be turened into heartless, he was so scared he couldent move but just when his parents were about to attack Ansem jumped in and saved the little guy

. After that Ienzo was determined to figure out what had happened to his parent's and why it had happened to them. Later on in his years when he was in he had just had his 23 birthday he heard that Ansem was looking for assistances to help him do research on the heartless, upon hearing this news Ienzo ran to the castle to end up being of of the youngest and most dedicated assistances. Due to his age the other apprentices often teased him which in return created a deep resentment for the other apprentices, but he wanted to work for the man who saved him so he tolerated it.

When Inzeos somebody still had a heart he was the youngest of six assistances/ test subjects to Ansems experiments on the human heart, during his time as an assistant to Ansem, Ienzo so enthusiastically convinced Ansem that it would be safer and better if they continued there study's in a more secure place, so Ansem decided to build an underground lab under hollow bastion, but when King Mickey came and talked to ansem he convinced him that continuing his studys were corrupt and morally wrong.

When Ansem stop his part of the experiments, his assistants didnt share his values and continued in secret, one day when they were performing an experiment on their hearts something went terrible wrong and the former were turned into heartless, and left there empty shells which later became the group we know today as organization XII. A few months after this event they all gathered and created the Dark XII with the goal to gather hearts.


Role Playing Sample:
He sighed as the light hit him when he opened his window, Why did it have to be today he asked himself. Ienzo went about his morning as usual with a morning coffee, a piece of toast, and an ice cold glass of orange juice. After breakfast, Ienzo set out for his daily stroll around Castle Abyss, wail he was walking alone the cold stone laiden path he noticed something shimmer, Been as curious as he was Ienzo walked over to the shimmer only to reveal that it was only a lost set of dog tags just like the one he was wearing, he didn’t know why but it was vaugely familler to him,” oh well” Ienzo said. “I’ll just show it to the other members when I see them… wait.. No I think I’ll keep this for myself, if I lost something thoses ungrateful little punks wouldent return it to me why should I spoil them with acts of kindness” He muttered Ienzo was starting to get upset. So he dicded he would go somewere to train and calm down.

“Where shall I go today I went to The pride lands and Christmas town yesterday..uh…hmmm… AH HA I shall go pay the old dusks a visit in Wonderland.” Decided Ienzo “ I wonder how that “”Queen of hearts”” is doing after that scare I gave her, but boy was her face worth all of that trouble of sending all of those heartless to that annoying queenies specific location but in the end it was worth it..”. Ienzo chuckeled as he remenised of pranks now passed “ ok lets get this party started” Ienzo said as he steped into the black void which he had conjured embracing the darkness he walked through the darkness and steped out in Wonderland.

In shock Ienzo couldent help but let out a little smirk, Every thing from the trees to the tower in the center of the courtyard was chared. Ale he thought to him self “ why dose he always get to have all the fun” now Ienzo was really upset once again he set foot into the darkness and pops out back at the castle. Walking briskly to Ale’s part of the castle he bangs loudly calling his name “Ale ALE!!.... COME ON I KNOW YOUR IN THERE NOW COME OUT THIS INSTI.” Before Ienzo could finish his sentence the smug, idiot came out of his room rubbing his eyes “What do you want now kid” said Ale “For one I'm just as important to this organization as you are so my age doesn’t matter, and secondly how could you do that to wonderland you know I’ve wanted to do that, I’ve always had it out for the old queenie”” Well its not my fault you didn’t get there before me now is it”.

They fought like this for at least another half hour by this time they were walking all over the castle” well you know what at least I don’t louse my dog tag” “What you have my dog tags, give them here you little runt” “go get them Ienzo said” and he tossed the dog tags into shadows “where did you send them” asked Ale “why don’t you go find out.. oh better hurry its closing” Ale nervously looked at the closing void then back at Ienzo then at the void, after only a seconded hesitation Ale jumped after his dog tags “ HAHA” said Ienzo “ that’s what you get for messing with the Deceptive Calligrapher. After that tussle with Ale Ienzo was really tired SO he decided that he would just go to his dark silent room were he could sit silently with his devilishly plans brewing inside his mind.

[sulcal]

The age makes little sense, mind you that the assistants were grown men, although that is just a nit-picky detail. The RP sample needs spacing. And the appearance meets requirements, but a little expansion, along with on personality, would be lovely, thank you.

[paopuluver]

Thank you for the advice Leon, I'll fix it right away:D

[sulcal]

Alright! The spacing made this a lot easier to read. Usually, when a different character talks, there's another paragraph, but as for what I see, the sample is fine, with some grammatical errors, but that's also not too much of a big deal, seeing as you know how to grasp that.

The history and age and appearance still needs some work, though. If that's fixed, then there shouldn't be too much of a problem.

[paopuluver]

Ok, Thanks how do you think I could improve on the history and apperence? And what age would you guys like Ienzo to be?

[sulcal]

Thank you for asking a question. First and foremost, I think you can improve the history by, like a general amount of people, starting with a pre-history; telling what happened, as far back as you like, with what happened before the described history in KHII, along with what happened with Ienzo in RG during the time Ansem the Wise ruled, and up to current times. I do believe that he was, at the least, in his twenties at the time of being an apprentice, so that's a very good start.

With appearance make it slightly more detailed, a good depth, to improve on what characters will see. I hope this helps!

[paopuluver]

Thank you it dose, and thanks for all of the advice
I HOPE I DO THIS Right

[paopuluver]

is that better?

[sulcal]

Excellent! Now the final thing that just needs more to it is the personality. After that edit, you should be good!

[paopuluver]

IS that better?

[sulcal]

Yes! Accepted. Please post the profile in the Final Profiles board and in the right character category, as well as place the link in your sig. Happy RPing!

[paopuluver]

Thank you <(^_^)>